...Bailey
Big Write was based on the story we read by Pie Corbett called The King of the Birds. Year 4 were quite confused after reading it because there was no mention of a King of the Birds, however, there was a character who was the King of Horses.
After contacting Mr Corbett, he asked if Year 4 could write Part 2, in which the title of the story would become clear.
So, here are some examples of the stories written on Friday called;
King of the Birds part 2
Children supporting each other to make their work even better.
Reply with examples of the feedback you gave or received from your partner.
me and my partner discussed what i needed to do to inprove it we both thought that my opening was boring and there were thing that were changed when they did not need to be changed.
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welldone baily i must admit it was a fab story.
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me and my partner dicussed that he needed to read it through to check it made sense beacuse parts of it didn't make sense and we had to add a few bits in to make sure the rader understood what he was on about.
ReplyDeletewell done bailey your story was amazing I liked how you said 'and the people lived in joyful harmony'
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed listening to your story bailey It was great.
ReplyDeleteHello Year 4,
ReplyDeleteWhat a wonderful task Mr Corbett set for you. Being invited to write the second part of a story involves you all in his imagination and invites you to stretch your own imaginations to complete the story.
From the part 2 stories I've read, I can see how much thought you all have put into your work. Well done, everyone. :)
@RossMannell
Teacher, NSW, Australia
i got no votes but i had to help LukeA bailey i want to say well done!!!
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