Elle
We have been using the book The Lion and The Unicorn for the last few weeks and on Friday the Big Write task was to write a diary entry as Lenny Levi.
Deciding which one should be showcased was very hard but I managed to make a decision.
Here is Elle's incredible diary entry. Please leave her some feedback.
Wow! What wonderful writing! Congratulations! I love the way you have got into the character. Year 4 is my favourite class to teach. I would love to teach you!
ReplyDeleteWell done elle love your story congatulations you shall be going in the frame.
ReplyDeleteThank you hannah I am very proud of myself and i felt very proud when another teacher came up to me and said i have just read your work and it is fantastic.
ReplyDeletewell done elle I like your big write it was good
ReplyDeleteElle, this is a stunning piece of writing, well done. You write in character throughout and you have captured what it must have been like for children evacuated during World War 2 brilliantly.
ReplyDeleteHello Elle,
ReplyDeleteYour diary entry is brilliant. It is neat, well written and very interesting. You must be in a wonderful class.
@RossMannell
Teacher, NSW, Australia
Thank you Mrs Stones I had to think long and hard to get my ideas bu in the end managed a wonderful peice of writing like this.
ReplyDeleteElle,this is a AMAZING piece of work why dont you try do 4 pages of writing that is a challenge for you from me.
ReplyDeletedo u accept?
Yes luke but like Mrs Warner said its the quality of work that counts not the quantity I have done four pages before but then when we had to rewrite it,it wasnt as easy as when we was writting it the first time round.
ReplyDeleteThank you Mr Mannel
ReplyDeleteIt just goes to show if you but enough effort in if could be noticed from miles around.
Well Done Elle your diary was brilliant.
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